Below is from the end of the scene after the hero, Josh, and the heroine, Miriam, have gone on their first date. Their history is rocky and they work together, and this is the first time they've socialized together without either one making the other angry.
“Thanks for dinner, Josh. I had a lovely time.”
“Even without the duck and the bananas?”
“Stop!”
She smacked his arm and he pretended to be injured.
“I had a great time too.
I’m glad you agreed to have dinner with me. Maybe we’ll do it again?”
“I’d like that.” She looked at him and
smiled.
He tipped his head and Miriam could feel his breath warm her face. Mere
inches apart, she could see silver and black flecks in his
irises, stubble on his cheeks, the arch of his eyebrow. Shivers zinged up her
spine. Like a magnetic pull, she wanted to lean into him, to feel his body
against hers, to press her lips against his. But they worked together, and a
kiss would change everything. As if he read her mind, he pulled back, said
goodbye and got into the cab and drove away. Miriam covered her lips with her
fingers.
What in the world was she supposed to do now?
He’d come close to kissing her. She could still feel the electric charge
between them; still catch a slight scent of his musky aftershave in the air.
His hand had held her arm with enough pressure to keep her against him.
Although she’d watched him leave, she could still feel the imprint of his
touch. She stroked her hand up and down her arm.
Did she give away how much she wanted to kiss him
too? It was so quick, so unexpected, she couldn’t be sure. Her mind shot off in
all directions as she entered her building and took the elevator to her fifth
floor apartment.
They worked together! How in the world was she
supposed to look at him when they next met? Should she acknowledge the kiss
that almost happened? Should she pretend it never did? He didn’t plan on
discussing it at their next meeting, did he?
She sank onto her sofa, kicked off her shoes and
for once, didn’t care where they landed. She was too busy thinking about his
almost kiss. And the little zing. She arched her back and tried to recreate the
feeling.
Was she attracted to him? She thought about their
dinner. She’d enjoyed his company. He’d intrigued her with his reactions to the
mistakes at the restaurant. And she was interested to know more about his list
of pleasing things.
Was he attractive? Yes. His eyes reflected his
mood and changed from light to dark grey in an instant. He wore his clothes
well and they emphasized a well-toned body. On anyone else, she’d be eager to
remove them to study him more closely.
But this was Josh. Josh, who’d hurt her sister.
She’d gotten over her anger at him sometime between their last meeting and
tonight’s dessert. But would it be a betrayal of Samara to fall for him? She
looked out for Samara; how could she be attracted to a guy who’d hurt her, even
if the hurt had healed?
Super show of emotions, Jen!
ReplyDeleteI like the tension of the 'almost kiss' in this scene!
ReplyDeleteThanks, ladies.
ReplyDeleteI second Ana's comment. The emotions really come through in this scene. Nice job with description, too, without overdoing it and overshadowing the scene.
ReplyDeleteThank you. :)
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