Having finally got to the end of 27 chapters, I put the whole thing together, and now I'm in the process of seeking out repeat words and phrases in the full ms. Yes, the ones we all use too much - I still have a list of about 20 words I need to check!
But here, as a sneak peek, is the start of the novel.
“A house in Ireland?” Jenna Sutton stared over the mahogany desk at the lawyer. “Someone I’ve never heard of has left me a house in Ireland?”
The grey-haired lawyer peered at her over his steel-rimmed spectacles. “A half share of the house, Ms. Sutton. Along with a half share of what, at current exchange rates, amounts to approximately fifty thousand pounds.”
Jenna shook her head and swiped several strands of her hair back behind her ear. “I don’t understand. Why would this Helena—what did you say her name was?”
“Miss Helena Keating.”
“Why has she left me a house and twenty-five thousand pounds? How does she even know about me?”
“Ms. Sutton, I can only give you the information passed to me by the law firm of Daniel McGrath in Dublin. We were instructed to find any descendants of James Oliver Sutton—”
“Yes, and as far as we can ascertain, you are his sole descendant."
Here's my (draft) blurb for this story:
Will an old Irish house bring them together or drive them apart?
English actress Jenna Sutton and American artist Guy Sinclair first meet when they jointly inherit a house on the west coast of Ireland. Curious about their unknown benefactress and why they are both considered as 'family', they gradually work out their links to the original owners of the house. At the same time as they are unravelling a nineteenth century love story, they struggle against their mutual attraction to each other. The two lovers in the past were destined not to have a happy ending, and it seems the same thing will happen to their descendants - or will it?
My question to you - would the blurb and the first page make you want to know more? I'm not fishing for any compliments, but for your honest opinion. :-)