Xenon is a colourless, odourless, inert gas, used in arc
lamps, and sometimes as a general anaesthetic.
What has this to do with writing? It occurred to me that
sometimes our writing can be like this – colourless, odourless and inert. Happily
it does sometimes light up like an arc lamp, other times it seems so dull that
it’s sending you to sleep, never mind
your readers.
So how do we get our writing out of the ‘Xenon’ mode?
Colourful instead of
colourless: this doesn’t just mean describing the colour of the sea, or the
heroine’s hair, or the hero’s eyes, of course. Nor does it mean pages of purple
prose. ‘Colourful’ means capturing the reader by making our characters and the
whole world in which they live come alive. Create ‘real’ characters with whom
the reader can empathise and show their surroundings through their eyes. Make
them jump out of the pages and into the imagination of the reader in full
technicolour, not just in black and white.
Aromatic instead of
odourless: the sense of smell is important – new mown grass, a rose,
woodsmoke, freshness of the air after rain … etc. This leads us on to the other
senses: sight, sound, touch and taste. All important in evoking emotions in our
readers. Again, show them through a character’s perception. Don’t tell the
reader the tree had a gnarled truck; have your heroine running her hand along
its rough bark. Put the senses within an action, not outside of it. But don’t
overdo it. Less is more!
Animated instead of inert:
an inert gas does not react with other
substances and does not undergo any chemical reactions. That’s the last thing
we want in our stories! Our characters need to react with each other, of
course, and they also need to undergo some kind of ‘growth’ during the story, whether
it’s overcoming a fear or flaw, learning something about themselves, or dealing
with a personal conflict.
We need to concentrate on the ‘arc light’ capability of Xenon and not its anaesthetic qualities, by keeping our writing dazzlingly bright and
not soporific! A Xenon Ion Drive engine can be used to propel spacecraft on
deep space missions by firing a beam of energetic xenon ions – so let’s do the
same, and reach for the stars!
Brilliant post, Paula. (Pun unintended but I'll claim it.)
ReplyDeleteI'm rereading an old Jayne Ann Krenz novel with an analyst's eye. She qualifies every noun with two, and sometimes three, adjectives.
I have a hard time describing smells, scents, and tastes interestingly.
Thanks, Ana! I recently reread part of a novel I used to like, but realised how 'wordy' the author was, using 3 or more sentences to say something that could have been said in half a dozen words! No wonder the novel was about 3 inches thick!
ReplyDeleteAnd I have problems describing those three senses too!
What an excellent post, Paula. New writers don't always get it right, as you say, but it's also easy for more experienced writers to forget these things.
ReplyDeleteI agree, Margaret. I have to keep reminding myself to use all the senses!
DeleteInteresting post, Paula. Always good to keep those things in mind when we write and edit.
ReplyDeleteI think they're all essential in any story - and I have to keep reminding myself of them!
DeleteThe senses really do bring our writing to life. But I agree that it's important not to overdo. Writing really is a very delicate balancing act.
ReplyDeleteVery true, Debra. Some writers do tend to go overboard with their descriptions!
Deletefascinating post and a good reminder to use all of the senses when writing.
ReplyDeleteBut not necessarily all five senses at the same time, Carol. I'm a firm believer in 'less is more' otherwise we run the risk of a sensory overload!
DeleteA good point
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