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I am gradually disconnecting from my CSA job. Dark dirt embedded in my hand and knee callouses is wearing off. I don't rush outdoors at daybreak. A stubborn ache in my left butt has subsided. The biggest change, though, is in my head. My imagination is back.
This is good news! Ideas for my three WIP compete for frontal brain stage.
I read an announcement for a new press dedicated to westerns and western historicals. So I decided to pull my first novel out of its dust covered folder.
Here's the opening sentence.
What do you think?
Gripping the crisp Demand for Payment notice, Stormy Hawkins marched up to the Prosperity Land and Loan, pushed back her leather work hat, and kicked the door with the dusty heel of her boot until she heard the heavy thunk of a deadbolt.
So glad you're getting back into writing mode again, Ana - and that's a great opening sentence which says so much in just a few words.
ReplyDeleteWelcome back, Ana! I like the first sentence, although I wouldn't say "until she heard..." To me, it sounds like she's kicking it over and over again. I'd end the sentence with "handle" and just start a new one.
ReplyDeleteI'd definitely read on...great opener, Ana.
ReplyDeleteAnd I love your heroine's name: Stormy gives us a super hint as to her personality. Of course the kicking of the door helps, too! :)
Good luck!
Thanks for the encouragement! I imagined that she kicked the door repeatedly. She's angry.
ReplyDeleteOh, well in that case, keep it!
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